THE HUSBAND LOOKED FOR
Am I sure that I will get married someday? Of course,I will be married and also with a perfect man.Actually saying that a perfect man can be seem a dream but I belive in him.I believe my dreams.We will have a happily after.Everyting will be perfect.I will find the man who is unique.I will have the man who is looking for by every ladies.That’s that! Here the man…
I want a husband who really feel me in his inside.He loves me more than himself.I want a husband saying always “yes”.He never argues with me and he does whatever I want.He never thinks,he only does everything.I want a husband who takes care of me.when I feel bad,he makes me feel better.There won’t be anytime when I feel bad with him.I want a husband who does not smoke and he helps me to quit it.I want a husband who has so much money.He will buy whatever I want and also we always go another cities,countries.I want a husband who is a good father.He will take care of our children.I want a husband who doesn’t talk so much.I want a husband who likes to listen to me.It doesn’t matter how much I talk.He always listens me.I want a husband who pays attention our house.there won’t be any lack in our house.I want a husband who makes surprise.The surprises must be so many that I should be bored.I want a husband who doesn’t shut me but when I shut him he should not say a word.I want husband who doesn’t makes me sad.If he makes,he can know to apoligese.He should be aware of his mistakes.I want a husband who is careful about my needs in emotions.sometimes he can understand me without talking to me.When he sees my face,he will get my mood and he should find a solution immediately.
I want husband,I want husband...All ladies want not just husband,they want the perfect one.I will find,may be I have already had him…Time passes quickly and I will have been married unique husband after five years.
Dear, i liked your essay. Hook and background is pretty good. However,i stiil could not understand how to write this essay :( and i do not know why. if your style is true, i liked it. your body paragraph is very good. well done :P maybe your conclusion needs some more.. anyway, see you..
YanıtlaSilDear,I don't know who you are :) may be you should write your name next time.Idon't know exactly how to write it but I tried.I missed this lesson and thank you
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YanıtlaSilYou want too much things that they may not be come in true:) But dreaming is good. It is a dream. Everybody knows that there is not any perfect man.
Your essay is really good. Language is correct. There isn't any problem in terms of tenses, structures and any other things. But there is a problem with words. I want to write them here. 'seem, belive, happily (It isn't used in there. It is an adverb. You should check it.), shut, apoligese.' You should correct them. Organization is also faultless. Your perfect man examples aren't persuasive:) But I hope you will find such a faultless husband.
To sum up, I liked your essay very much. It is an accurate essay.