31 Aralık 2010 Cuma

Evrim ERTAY/THREE KINDS OF POLLUTION(classification)

People in the world have struggled with many problems since the recorded time.The people in the world have to endevaour with these problems.These problems have some bad results such as contagious disease, extinction of some animal species.In addition to these results,we don't have fresh air in the world and what are the reasons for them?Environmental pollution is one of the reasons that cause people to get affected badly.It includes air pollution, water pollution and soil pollution.
     The first kind of pollution is soil pollution and this kind of pollution is caused by fertilizers and insecticides.Why are we using fertilizer and insecticides?The answer is simple :we have crowded population and the amount of population increases day by day.The swelling population of the world makes us use fertilizers and insecticides.In addition to good aspects,they are the main things that give rise to pollution.Fertilizer spread over farmlands and reach into rivers by rain .This kills alot of fish in the water .Insecticides are one of two kinds and one kind can protect its toxic in the soil for years and the danger arises from the poison.
     The other kind of pollution is water pollution.Our waters are affected badly.Why are our waters dirty now?Because men have used the water as a dumping ground for waste products.You can think that the water is large and they can include lots of waste products,but this is completely wrong.Water's capacity is not unlimited.For example, in Baltic sea,there is no oxygen due to the fact that it is polluted seriously.The other example is coastal areas around Britain. these areas are polluted by the discharge of tank washing by ships and industries also polute these areas.They dispose of unwanted waste.In order to dispose cheaply, they use these places.
     The third kind of pollution is air pollution.Industries are one of the most important reason of air pollution.The first reason why it is the most important is that they cover much land.Because of this,we have less fresh air.By industries,some harmful products expose.For example,2 million ton of smoke,5 million tons of sulphur gas and 1.5 million tons of grit and ash expose.By this exposure,rainfall over Europe has become more acid in recent years and this acid affects the growth of trees in Scandinavia.These are not complete.There are even worse than these.The amount of carbon dioxide can increase in the atmosphere due to burning oil and coal and this may lead to a rise in Earth's temperature.Rising temperature may lead to melt the ice-caps and arise in the level of the ocean.
     Actually , the most effective reason of pollution is people and people have to struggled with these problems.There are three kind of pollution such as air ,water and soil pollution and we have to prevent these problems.We polute air, water and soil and if we don't have any prevention to these problems,lots of living creature will die

4 yorum:

  1. AYŞE BALIN
    I didn't find any mistake in your essay. Although you used some wrong tenses in your essay, it is so fluent that these wrongs don't irritate me.
    Your essay's organization is faultless. You described these pollution in a so perfect manner that your essay attracted me.
    Honestly, I couldn't give a bad feedback about your faultless essay.

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  3. MERVE DÖNMEZ

    your thesis statemen is so clear that you have explained your ideas in an organization. your ideas are linked with your thesis statement. I couldn't any mistake. good essay :)) thank you.

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  4. AYŞEN ERASLAN
    dear evrim,
    ı think introduction will be more effective ıf you correct some parts.
    you can connect these sentences with relative clause---The people in the world have to endevaour with these problems which have some bad results such as...
    instead of long sentences you should connect them using relatives.they will make this essay more fluent.
    spelling and punctuation is good it has unity
    and overall it is nice

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