HOW CAN WE PLAN OUR VACATIONS
Planning a vacation can be exciting but sometimes it is hard to decide where to go.Should I spend my vacatıon at the beach or go a camping?While many rich people travelling the globe,some people plan a trip to a special place according to their interest and budget.There are three options which can be choosen.
The first one is cultural vacation.Usually,this is a place you have never been before such as historical cities,museums..A vacatıon like this make you more knowledgeable
and it can give a new perspective in life.You may have an opportunity to visit different places and meet new people.
The second and the most enjoyable type for your special vacation is nature and resorts vacation.It is a perfect vacation because all of your plans are arranged only for fun.It is suitable for busy people who are under great deal of pressure.Sunbathing,swimming,fishing and biking around the forest are the perfect ways to remove yourself from the daily problems.
The last one is thermal vacation.It has been becoming popular day by day due to effective advertisements.It is suitable for people who suffer from various illnesses.With their rich minerals thermal waters help you to recover from your illnesses and make you relax.If you are travelling by yourself the most suitable one is travel packages.You can choose tour groups which arrange every detail for you.
In short,while planning a vacation you can benefit from many alternatives,but we should keep in mind that our interest and budget are the most effective factors .
AYŞE BALIN
YanıtlaSilHoney, your essay is faultless. I read again and again your essay but I couldn't any mistakes.
Hi ayşen:)
YanıtlaSilorganization:there are a hook and a thesis statement in the introduction.There are three body paragraphs and a conclusion.It is good, but in the last body paragraph, you explain two type of vacation.
grammar:there are some mistakes such as 'globe'.I think the word'world' is more suitable than 'globe'.I think his sentence mus be corrected'A vacatıon like this make you more knowledgeable'.'It makes you more knowledgeable or ıt is more informative'can be.
content:there is a unity,but I can't understand
'culturel vacation,special vacation,the shopping and night life vacation'I think you can find more suitable words.
Finally, I liked your essay.while I was readind, I wasn't bored.thanks.EVRİM ERTAY.
hi ayşen,
YanıtlaSilyour introduction is nice and thesis statement is clear.instead of globe you should use 'world'
body paragraps are effective and include a tense mistake.this make you--this makes you.
coonclusion is ok.
overall is a good essay.