Nonconventional medicine is the way that people use to improve their health, but people don't know if their treatment works or not.I think it is sometimes a good treatment for people's health.For example , if you catch a cold , there are lots of way to feel better without any pills or any kind of medication;however, it can be seen as a wrong treatment by some people.When we examine most of cancer patients or some pills that affect people's health badly or some kind of alternative therapies, we can understand nonconventional medicine make us feel better than the other kind.
There are three important event that we can understand nonconventional medicine's positive effect.I think the most important one is cancer treatments.Everybody know cancer is a fatal disease, but we can't say all cancer patients will die.This disease requires some treatments such as chemotheraphy, radiotherapy and surgery.Many cancer patients have these treatment,but %96 of all cancer patients die.Is this a successful treatment for cancer?The other thing I can say is pills.Some pills are bad effect on our body.They can even be fatal.For example,some pills have strong effect on heart and people who take the pills can die of heart attack.At the same time, they can destroy people's kidney.The last one is nonconventional medicine for high blood pressure.High blood pressure can develop without signs or symptoms and exist for years;however,unknown high blood pressure can result in serious health risk such as heart attack,so alternative therapies such as acupuncture, yoga can help.
Nonconventional medicine , also known as alternative medicine , can help us feel better.Why is it effectice?The answer is simple: people know what they can do for their health, that is they can know the best treatment.Because of this , their treatment will be successful.I think alternative medicine is the best way to feel better if your illness is not more serious.
There are three important event that we can understand nonconventional medicine's positive effect.I think the most important one is cancer treatments.Everybody know cancer is a fatal disease, but we can't say all cancer patients will die.This disease requires some treatments such as chemotheraphy, radiotherapy and surgery.Many cancer patients have these treatment,but %96 of all cancer patients die.Is this a successful treatment for cancer?The other thing I can say is pills.Some pills are bad effect on our body.They can even be fatal.For example,some pills have strong effect on heart and people who take the pills can die of heart attack.At the same time, they can destroy people's kidney.The last one is nonconventional medicine for high blood pressure.High blood pressure can develop without signs or symptoms and exist for years;however,unknown high blood pressure can result in serious health risk such as heart attack,so alternative therapies such as acupuncture, yoga can help.
Nonconventional medicine , also known as alternative medicine , can help us feel better.Why is it effectice?The answer is simple: people know what they can do for their health, that is they can know the best treatment.Because of this , their treatment will be successful.I think alternative medicine is the best way to feel better if your illness is not more serious.
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YanıtlaSilı could not understant which part is introduction.thesis staement is not clear you give your ideas in the second sentences and you should use examples in the body paragraps.intro.should be clear
your body paragraps is nice but conclusion has problem.you should restate your thesis statemant instead of asking question.it will make it more fluent.
word order,punctuation,spelling is good.thanks
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