WHAT A GIANT OF THE TOURISM!
Can you imagine a city where has a huge tourism potential, but at the centre of the city you cannot find anything to do? While you are going to 15 kilometers away from city centre, you can find endless opportunities to enjoy, why didn’t you find at the centre? You don’t have facilities except for some cafes and live music bars. Can you guess where am I talking about? It is Muğla where has been known as a tourism city where has not a social life.
Firstly, Muğla is an undeveloped city, because of lacking shopping centres, facilities, somewhere we can go etc. You get bored with your life there. Think, your only pastime activity is sitting in a cafe. What a boring situation!
Secondly, I think people don’t give importance to the centre of Muğla. They investigate to countries and so centre of the city doesn’t develop. There is no job opportunities for people. Everything is limited. Municipality doesn’t work well. They do same things all the time. They don’t do anything to develop city. You can walk all around the cith in half an hour. Posibility of meeting same people is so high once, twice or more time.
As a result, this condition must be realized and stopped in a short time. Investigators, people, municipality, government of the city have to do something to develop city.
Hi ender
YanıtlaSilOrganisation is good but it can be better.you should add some sentences your conclusion because your conclusion part is too short.Introduction part is great but your body paragraphs are not enough.I think you can write one or two more paragraph for your body paragraph part.Gramer is great i couldn't see any gramatical mistake but i am not sure maybe others can find.Content is also good.Your essay has fluency.Well done!
Mehmet Aktaş